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He whispers to me.

Leave me alone...

He runs his hands through my hair as he stares into my eyes.

Stop touching me. Stop looking at me that way.

I feel his lips upon mine and my eyes flutter shut.

Stop toying with me. We both know you don't mean it.

His body pressed unnaturally close to me and I feel the heat.

A still broken heart trying to fly...trying to fight.

I feel his hand brushing away tears of the past.

No. Don't do this to me. Don't make me believe...

"Please, darling, don't make me pay for their mistakes."

Just stop. Don't say the right thing at the right time.

He tells me he doesn't care how long he has to wait for me.

Forever! I'll never succumb to love again.

He says he needs me. He tells me he wants me in his life.

I don't want to believe. I can't let myself believe...

He told me I was made just for him.

I wasn't made for anyone

He says he can't believe he was lucky enough to find me.

Such pretty words...

I hear him whisper, "Let me love you."

...and I do...
Learning to love can be the hardest lesson of all. Luckily enough, its usually very gratifying.

Thank God I'm healing inside.
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Daiichi Featured By Owner Sep 23, 2008  Hobbyist Writer
I love this piece..not only does it speak to tons upon tons of people..but bringing in the whole environment really puts the reader in the picture..and the description is perhaps even more encouraging..:D! :+fav:
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cyre Featured By Owner Sep 24, 2008
Yay! I'm really glad you liked it. I was hoping that I could make this piece so that a lot of people could relate or at least find something in it that speaks to them and where they may have been in their life. Thanks so much for the feedback and your opinions they mean so much to me.
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TenebrousLyke Featured By Owner Sep 6, 2008
Oh! I like the ending ^_^ I'm a sucker for happy endings...
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cyre Featured By Owner Sep 21, 2008
I try to do happy endings...seriously I do.
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Kha7 Featured By Owner Sep 4, 2008  Hobbyist Writer
Reading this reminds me of a situation I once lived...

Like you say, learning to love may be very difficult...

This poem has a great power! Very good work!
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cyre Featured By Owner Sep 20, 2008
I feel its powerful. I'm glad you feel the same! Thanks so much.
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Sol-Grim Featured By Owner Sep 2, 2008
Powerful
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cyre Featured By Owner Sep 20, 2008
Thanks!
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NINTheFragile Featured By Owner Aug 31, 2008
in this writing there is allot of stress and anger that is mainly release by the last line. You do a great job of leading the reader up to that point and toying with the readers interest along the way. Great wording and structure and some very real perspectives and points made here.

The you where made for me part can either be interpreted by the receiving end as creepy or sweet depending upon the person. Also that statement creates thought and mystery on the interpretation of that sentence and also maybe open peoples mind up to other perspectives so good work.
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cyre Featured By Owner Aug 31, 2008
Thank you! I'm so glad you can actually see past the surface value of this piece. Yes, it can be taken as a little darker than at first glance or prettily at face value. Thanks again!
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chrysromeo Featured By Owner Aug 31, 2008
that's a positive conclusion, good for you
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cyre Featured By Owner Aug 31, 2008
Thank you, Chrys, I'm trying real hard.
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aka-ash Featured By Owner Aug 31, 2008
Wow, I love this. And I used to feel this way...

Wonderful =]
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cyre Featured By Owner Aug 31, 2008
Aww, thanks, I'm glad you could at least relate to it one way or another!
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richmond-c Featured By Owner Aug 31, 2008  Hobbyist Writer
I like it. Very moving.
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cyre Featured By Owner Aug 31, 2008
:hug: Thank you!
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LouiseOdier Featured By Owner Aug 31, 2008
Wonderful work - Hun. I love the kind you make it. :clap:
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cyre Featured By Owner Aug 31, 2008
:hug: Thank you so much, Susanna, I can always count on your honesty and support!
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LouiseOdier Featured By Owner Sep 1, 2008
always a pleasure, Hun :iconsomehugsplz:
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cyre Featured By Owner Sep 1, 2008
Yay!
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cholie Featured By Owner Aug 30, 2008
I noticed that you have this as "critique not desired", but in all honesty there is nothing to critique. This is perfect the way it is--it is very well written. Congrats on learning to love again. :) :+favlove: :hug:
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cyre Featured By Owner Aug 30, 2008
:hug::glomp:

Thank you so much! That means the world to me!
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cholie Featured By Owner Aug 30, 2008
:D You are most welcome! :hug: :glomp:
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cholie Featured By Owner Aug 30, 2008
P.S. I wish you the very best. :D
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cyre Featured By Owner Aug 30, 2008
Thank you again. You are so sweet.
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cholie Featured By Owner Aug 30, 2008
You're welcome! :D I try. ^^;
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