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True Love's Confession by *cyre:iconcyre:



I should have told you, the moment that I met you, that I could fall head over heels for you.

When we spent late nights talking about everything and nothing, I should have told you that I was attracted to you.

When you showed me your sensitive side, then hurriedly tried to cover it with a witty phrase, I should have told you that I was in awe of you.

When the rain was falling, so fast we couldn't see, I should have kissed you.

When the night was cold and you complained of it's bitterness, I should have held your hand.

When you smiled and my knees went weak, I should have told you.

When you touched me, I should have mentioned the jump of my stomach.

When I saw the ache of sadness in your eyes, I should have held you fast to me.

When I looked into your eyes, and you asked what was the matter, I should have told you that I adore you and when you showed me things, no one else has, I should have said, that I feel everything for you.

When you stood beside me and asked why I was staring, I should have told you how strong you make me feel and when you walked away, I should have screamed how weak I am without you.

When you were talking to others, I should have begged for your attention.

I should have told you how jealous I am of the people who know you much better than I.

I should have mentioned the times I spent plotting how to bring out the smile, that warms everything inside of me, but I didn't and now your walking away, and I'm calling to you, you turn, and I'm speechless.

I don't know what to say but your waiting and I have to say it now or I'll loose you, and without you I'm nothing.

Stumbling and mumbling, you ask what I'm trying to say. So I say the only thing that matters.

I love you.
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Author's Comments

This has to be one of my favorite ones! I would hope it speaks for itself. All the things that lovers feel and want to say...in a poem.

Comments


:iconniareh:
In a word, I'd have to say that's incredibly well written. At any other time, I might be able to provide you with a better-worded comment and perhaps even a decent critique- however, I'm afraid that I find myself at a complete and utter loss for words. Quite possibly because I'm exhausted, and my bed seems to be calling to me more strongly than usual. However, that doesn't mean I can't stangle a decent word or two out of my mind! Infact, I am certain I can do it for you.

The theme itself is well done, and the way you've written to it is in such a way that most people can identify with it on some level, at least in some part of the poem. It's free somehow, and thus all the better for it- it doesn't seem like controlled writing, you follow? Something more raw, a little more elemental and a little more pure. That's something that I can respect in volumes, and something that I'm only now learning how to do with any amount of true success. I look forward to seeing more of your writings around, and I hope that you can forgive me for a lack of a better-written comment.

Best of wishes, and keep it up! :heart:

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o If at first you do succeed try to hide your astonishment.

o If you can't learn to do it well, learn to enjoy doing it badly.

... It's a process of waiting it out. It's the life of an artist.
:iconcyre:
Why I certainly couldn't tell you were tired! What a very wonderful comment you gave me, so thought out! I appreciate it more than I can tell you! I'm so very glad that you enjoyed it like you did, once again I appreciate the comment, and the fav. it means alot to me!

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"To Dream by Day is to be cognizant of many things which escape those who merely dream by night"
-Poe
:iconbladegolem47:
I really like this one :D

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You missed when time and life shook hands and said goodbye, when the earth folded in on itself.
:iconcyre:
This one is by far one of the best I've written, in my opinion. Thank you so much for the comment and the fav. it means SO much to me.

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"To Dream by Day is to be cognizant of many things which escape those who merely dream by night"
-Poe
:iconjenishi-kumiko:
Beautiful... Simply beautiful!

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My Prose

My Poetry
:iconblizz-kid:
Very well put. I quite enjoyed it.

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"No one can be told what the Matrix is; you have to see it for yourself." -Morpheus
:iconcyre:
I'm glad you feel that way, as I said perhaps my most favorite.

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"To Dream by Day is to be cognizant of many things which escape those who merely dream by night"
-Poe
:iconcyre:
I'm very glad you did. I appreciate your comment!

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"To Dream by Day is to be cognizant of many things which escape those who merely dream by night"
-Poe
:iconshadowoflife:
i really like this one; the subject matter is well handled and the content is more or less well executed. i have a few minor issues, but i'll only extemporate if you are interested. other than that, good work!

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exterminate the hated, vanquish the conquered, torture the forsaken, and forsake the tortured

avatar, authortag courtesy ~dauntiemagic, devID courtesy ~zeferefr

i'm not a failure but i know what it's like...--slipknot
:iconcyre:
Thank you for your comment, I truly appreciate it. Because it came from my heart, its going to have imperfections, on the whole I'm sure it could use with a little bit of retouching and refining, but I like the ragged, unrefined feeling to it, which probably deminishes it but......oh well :D Thank you once again, for your word comment and the highly thought out compliment of adding it to your favorites!!! It means so much.

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"To Dream by Day is to be cognizant of many things which escape those who merely dream by night"
-Poe

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